Zi Brown

Attention

by Zi Brown

Creative Commons Tuesday October 20, 2015

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I am Armin. I follow the same routine everyday. I start from my home and make endless journey to the city.

I hope one day someone will acknowledge my existence. I just want someone to talk to.

Ever since mom died, no one could ever quite filled the void that she left.

When Erika left me, she added to the vacancy in my heart, turning it into a gaping black hole.

My workplace too caught fire. I was the only one there to see the smoldering charcoal. My office mates found new jobs in new cities, and not one of them has contacted me since.

Now, as I walk the streets once again, people don’t even seem to notice me. I haven’t looked in a mirror in ages. They might as well just be looking through me.

I’ve had it... I’m going to be noticed today. I’m going to make people pay attention to me.

I’ve already found what I’m looking for: a child standing just a little too close to the edge. His parents should be watching him more closely.

I hear a car approaching and get in position. The car is close enough now.

I shove the kid onto the road, and listen with great satisfaction to the crunching sounds accompanied by a chorus of screams.

I close my eyes and wait for the mob justice with arms wide. And I wait. Nothing but the sounds of panic and crying.

I open my eyes to see. Everyone rushes right past me like I’m not even there.

Dejected, I leave from there with the gruesome scene behind me. I’ll try something new tomorrow, something bigger, I’ll guarantee that someone will notice me.

It’s been so long now. So long since I’ve had someone to talk to. No one has even said my name since they identified my charred body in the ashes of my burnt workplace.

I am Armin. I follow the same routine everyday. I start from my home and make endless journey to the city. I hope one day someone will acknowledge my  existence. I just want someone to talk to. Ever since mom died, no one could ever quite filled the void that she left. When Erika left me, she added to the vacancy in my heart, turning it into a gaping black hole. My workplace too caught fire. I was the only one there to see the smoldering charcoal. My office mates found new jobs in new cities, and not one of them has contacted me since. Now, as I walk the streets once again, people don’t even seem to notice me. I haven’t looked in a mirror in ages. They might as well just be looking through me. I’ve had it... I’m going to be noticed today. I’m going to make people pay attention to me. I’ve already found what I’m looking for: a child standing just a little too close to the edge. His parents should be watching him more closely. I hear a car approaching and get in position. The car is close enough now. I shove the kid onto the road, and listen with great satisfaction to the crunching sounds accompanied by a chorus of screams. I close my eyes and wait for the mob justice with arms wide. And I wait. Nothing but the sounds of panic and crying. I open my eyes to see. Everyone rushes right past me like I’m not even there. Dejected, I leave from there with the gruesome scene behind me. I’ll try something new tomorrow, something bigger, I’ll guarantee that someone will notice me. It’s been so long now. So long since I’ve had someone to talk to. No one has even said my name since they identified my charred body in the ashes of my burnt workplace.

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Zi Brown

Zi Brown

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Joined May 2, 2014
331 comics published

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84 comments | 34 people | 3 languages | 14 countries

horse0509

horse0509 4 yrs ago from United States

whoa

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks.

IamMia-chan

IamMia-chan 4 yrs ago from Bosnia and Herzegovina

Armin died!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

yus

Danae.

Danae. 4 yrs ago from United States

I finally understand. So sad though. For the kid .-.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you for reading.

Zi agrees this was too dramatic.

amazing_person.6

amazing_person.6 4 yrs ago from United States

I never got the last box or the whole thing until I thought about it. NOBODY TALKED TO HIM SINCE HE DIED!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

yes, you got it right!

Thanks you for reading.

Ruquistrukiz

Ruquistrukiz 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

OHHHHHHH!!!! :O so he is a ghost or something like that???!!!! So cool ;)

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

yes he is a ghost, but he never realizes that he is one.

Rigo's comix

Rigo's comix 4 yrs ago from Indonesia

So sad.
* sniffles *

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

d'awww

[samuel]

[samuel] 4 yrs ago from New Zealand

How do you do this awesome business?!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you. I found this story on internet. I made the characters and backgrounds and changed things here and there.

Also the awesome community props came handy.

[samuel]

[samuel] 4 yrs ago from New Zealand

Cool...

CharlieBabu

CharlieBabu 4 yrs ago from United States

wow

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks Charlie.

CharlieBabu

CharlieBabu 4 yrs ago from United States

your welcome

Clugston

Clugston 4 yrs ago from United Kingdom

Wow, harsh but nice work.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks!

Clugston

Clugston 4 yrs ago from United Kingdom

No probs ;)

IamMia-chan

IamMia-chan 4 yrs ago from Bosnia and Herzegovina

he shove the kid on road and killen.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

yep!

IamMia-chan

IamMia-chan 4 yrs ago from Bosnia and Herzegovina

yeah!

AmericanRivers

AmericanRivers 4 yrs ago from United States

I litterally went out loud "What the f**k" when the guy pushed the child into the street. Nice job.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

aisha12

aisha12 4 yrs ago from United States

And totally spooked out! :)

aisha12

aisha12 4 yrs ago from United States

amazing dude and voted

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you Aisha.

aisha12

aisha12 4 yrs ago from United States

Your welcome Zi

roseangel

roseangel 4 yrs ago from United States

voted

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

AJ-Ka

AJ-Ka 5 yrs ago from United States

Woah how do you write this!? This excellent story telling Sir Zi Brown. I'm impressed.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

no i came across this story on internet. I just made some changes and imagined how the characters should look.

And thanks Ser JH555.

Drawsome32121

Drawsome32121 5 yrs ago from United Kingdom

This is so awesome, I love the twist!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

Percy Epsilon

Percy Epsilon 5 yrs ago from Canada

Dude, this is BEYOND amazing! *O* SOOOO amazing bro! *applauds*I'm speechless!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 4 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thank you bro.

1000things

1000things 5 yrs ago from India

That last panel.... my GAWD.... broke my heart. What a brilliant brilliant storyline

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks so much.

Created

Created 5 yrs ago from Netherlands

Well done and great twist! :)

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

ILoveMe5

ILoveMe5 5 yrs ago from United States

How do I move the arms and legs

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

you can go into the green mode by double clicking the character.

Best way is to go through @Georgy Girl's tutorials. They are great help for novice pixton members like us.

TeddyPolaBear

TeddyPolaBear 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

OMG... Thanks for the nightmares...

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

hahaha, thanks for reading.

roseangel

roseangel 5 yrs ago from United States

woah i am totally scared and well done

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

roseangel

roseangel 5 yrs ago from United States

your welcome

Purnie

Purnie 5 yrs ago from Canada

wow!

Purnie

Purnie 5 yrs ago from Canada

well done Zi

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you Purnie.

Queen.Taylor

Queen.Taylor 5 yrs ago from United States

That was awesome.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

ILoveMe5

ILoveMe5 5 yrs ago from United States

Amazing awsome twist at the end.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

Piano Princess

Piano Princess 5 yrs ago from United States

Wow awesome story!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

MadMic

MadMic 5 yrs ago from Malta

omg XD That twist in the end. Nice though poor guy

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks you.

Tr0n1ka

Tr0n1ka 5 yrs ago from United States

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhh Plot twist!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks.

what_a_story

what_a_story 5 yrs ago from Poland

You should have written screenplays for Mr Hitchcock. It's a pity he isn't alive. The nicest movie mistake here would be the fireproof chair in the last panel (just kidding) :)

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thank you so much.you are very sharp and the best & most positive critic on Pixton.

LOL, i added that chair at last moment, so as to give it a feel of office. but you correctly pointed out that chairs are not fire proof.my bad.

be good

be good 5 yrs ago from France

Ho! Cette histoire est à la fois triste, horrible et terriblement bien menée .... Pauvre homme !

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Merci.

Elina.

Elina. 5 yrs ago from France

Wow. Awesome.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thank you.

_Mirra_

_Mirra_ 5 yrs ago from United States

Ooooh, spooky!

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thanks Mirra.

MP3artistic

MP3artistic 5 yrs ago from Mexico

OMG i wanted to talk with him but now ill just hope he finds ME invisible

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

I too wouldn't like to encounter him.

MP3artistic

MP3artistic 5 yrs ago from Mexico

EEEHHHHHH!

Apricity

Apricity 5 yrs ago from United States

So spooky o.o

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

thank you.

Gribouch

Gribouch 5 yrs ago from Marshall Islands

that's so cool

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Thank you.

Louise91330

Louise91330 5 yrs ago from France

I love the story but it is sad :( ! The boxes are wonderful !

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

merci.

Zi Brown

Zi Brown 5 yrs ago from Location Unknown

Hello Friends, I do not own this story. I came across this short story on internet.

Thank you all for the wonderful community props, that I could use here.

Hope you like this comic. Please rate and comment.

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